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When the realization hit that it was gone his heart began a rapid, terrified thrumming as if preparing for take-off. It was there just a moment ago, it had been right there in front of him waiting to be picked up and carried to her. Frantically, clutched by a firm claw of fear, he searched the ground nearby, breathing with labored effort as he looked for his lost prize.
“Okay, okay, calm down,” she said in a soothing voice.
His head snapped up to see his furry, yellow, well gnawed tennis ball gripped firmly in her hand and in a blink his tail wagged happy again, all terror forgotten.
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I just love this. I used to own a golden retriever that loved his tennis balls until they were ratty and had yellow plumes like sunspots sticking out of ’em too. This made me think of him. I loved that dog!!
Thank you! They truly become family, don’t they!!
Lol! I was gripped too! I wonder if my dog feels that way when we play catch. Talk about frantic.
Yes, catch is very serious business 🙂 Thanks you for stopping by!!
Very well done. And no doubt this is exactly how it works in most dogs minds!!! 🙂
Thank you!!
So fun! You build up the tension so well…I’m picturing some guy in an airplane/life-threatening situation and then, whammy. Loved it. (Love dogs!)
Why thank you, Victoria!! Dogs are amazing 🙂
Love that so much, though I think my dog doesn’t care when the ball goes missing…she just thinks things disappear into a parallel universe and it doesn’t worry her!
You know, I have one dog who couldn’t possibly care less about the ball, but to my other dog fetch, the ball, and treats are all that matter. It’s all very serious 🙂
Awwwwww… I absolutely melted, Lillie. What a sweet story.
I’m so glad you liked it!! Thank you Cara 🙂
Oh excellent! For a minute here I thought it was a bridegroom mislaying the ring. And it was an equally important issue to the dog. My collie used to go frantic when his ball was missing – you couldn’t divert his attention from searching for is. Nice one Lillie, thanks for a reminder of the joy that is dogs. Just got to convince my husband now …
Oh, I’d be lost without my dogs! Thank you for the comment 🙂
This made me think of a childrens’ book in free verse I recently read called, LOVE THAT DOG by Sharon Creech.Thanks for sharing!
Oh, I’ll have to check that book out! Thanks for sharing and commenting!!
I think you’ve captured the dog’s emotions perfectly… I imagine this is exactly how they feel when a ball or other favourite toy goes missing! It’s a serious business in doggy-world! A sweet tale!
Thank you Michelle and it really truly is the most serious business 😀
Aww..this made me smile….poor dog! lol…glad he found his ball…. 🙂
Well I’m so glad 🙂 Thanks for stopping by!!!
So charming, fun and wonderful! Loved it, Lillie.
Thank you! My King Charles truly acts like this when he loses a ball…it’s an earth stopping tradgedy to him 🙂
What a sunny post. I could just feel his happiness–evidenced by his relieved and hearty tail-wagging, and then another chase!
Why thank you, Britton!!! Thank you for stopping by 🙂
Haaha, I pictured your character as a person in the first two lines! Lovely story 🙂
That’s what I was going for, so I’m glad to know it was successful! Thank you for the comment!!!
How adorable!! I too thought it was a person, but was laughing out loud when I realized it was a puppy! Very creative, Lillie!
Thank you Stephanie!! So glad you enjoyed it 🙂
lovely twist. Are you a dog owner? Thanks for playing at your own game too!
Thank you 🙂 And, oh yes I have two dogs. A boston terrier and a king charles spaniel. Love them bunches!!!
Not a doggy person (cats rule) but this was extremely cute at the end; the blind panic a dog goes through when its prize/toy is out of sight does make me laugh though. xxx
Cats are super cool, too 🙂 (but, dogs rule) Thanks for stopping by!!!
Your first three sentences could have gone in many different directions, so I was surprised to learn it was written from woof-woof’s POV. Clever and delightful choice.
Thank you Lora! Appreciate you stopping by 🙂
I was late with mine, but finally arrived. Enjoyed reading all the entries. Thanks for hosting this, Lillie. What day do you post the prompt?
Yay! So glad you made it 🙂 I post the prompt each week on Thursday.
haha that was brilliant, wonderful last sentence
Why thank you 😀
Sounds like my daughter’s dog. I enjoyed reading this 🙂
Aren’t dogs just the best 🙂 Thank you for stopping by!!!
I loved this!! I laughed out loud because my little dog absolutely freaks when he can’t find his throw toy!! Totally fun read!! 🙂
Oh, my dog Georgia made writing this so easy. He truly loses his cool when a ball is missing. Thank you for the super comment 😀
This is wonderful Lillie! You’ve captured the dog’s love for the game so well. You took me back to days when our Springer Spaniels chased tennis balls. Now I have a Lhasa Apso who half-heartedly chases his rawhide chew and never brings it back… I miss the game!
Why thank you! A friend of mine has Springer Spaniels and I adore those dogs. It always amazes me to get to know dogs and see a new and distinct personality in all of them 🙂